You might want to paste this in a word processor or something else with a spelling checker—there are a few errors. Also, I believe for such assignments you’re not supposed to use contractions, i.e. “were not” instead of weren’t. That’s just at first sight, I don’t really feel like reading it through thoroughly right now and I think you’d better first read it through yourself once again to remove any errors you might spot, so it reads easier. If it reads easier, it’s easier to judge the actual content.